Evaluating your own Foundation Portfolio Thriller Opening (Becky)

Evaluating your own Foundation Portfolio Thriller Opening.

Assessment Criteria	What went well	What did not go quite so well
Shooting material appropriate to the task set;	Shooting material successfully conveyed genre and presented a clear understandable narrative.	Murder scenes at the end of our short film were not presented proficiently as they were dark and unlit showing an unclear view of the setting and action tasking place in the scene.
Controlled use of the camera	Unstable camera conveyed thriller genre and created fear successfully. Controlled areas allowed for clear view of characters and no disorientation for the spectator.	Use of tracking shots would have increased the speed/pace of the film making it more exhilarating and more of a suspenseful rush. Could be used in murder scene as this would make it more suspenseful.
Attention to framing	Showed excellent knowledge of framing and applied to short film. Scenes were visually clear and conveyed the thriller genre.	Distorting the framing (such as canted angles) would have added to the thriller effect and disorientated the spectator for a more indulging viewing.
Variety of shot sizes	A variety of shot sizes were used to convey characters emotions, vulnerability and status helping to differentiate a crime thriller genre from one such as comedy.	More close ups should be included to express the characters emotions further and to create a vulnerability for victim so that the spectator and become engaged in the film and feel sympathy for the victim (Iona) / protagonist.
Close attention to mise en scene	Group members paid close attention to the use of mise en scene in their film to ensure and understandable and clear genre. Their use of mise en scene proficiently conveyed the given (Thriller) genre.	More ‘thriller’ like props can be included to excellently present the thriller genre. Make up and costume can be taken further by making the protagonist and victim (Iona) in a brighter colour, such as red or yellow, as this allows the character to stand out and suggests a more cheerful character in contrast the murderer (Mr Harvey).
Editing so that meaning is apparent to the viewer	Editing was effectively used to create and understandable story expressing the continuity of time and space proficiently. Cut transition scenes create disorientation adding the thriller effect.	Disorientating transitions can create too much confusion for the spectator and cause them to lose meaning and understanding of the story and narrative.
Making selective and appropriate use of shot transitions, captions and other effects	Appropriate shot transitions, captions and other effects were successfully parallel (matching) to the action presented in the film. The effects and transitions used were typical to and convey the thriller genre.	Title of film not effective as it is not presented clearly, the title of the film possibly unknown as it is in a hidden area of screen. Title should be placed in the middle of the screen to make it more known and apparent to the spectator. Minimal variety of transitions.
Recording and editing sound with images appropriately.	A variety of sound effects and foley’s were used in this short film to convey the genre and speed to the film. Sound matched and was parallel to the action being presented. Title sequence sound track was effective as it contrasted to the ghastly, gruesome and murderous scenes being presented giving an effective chilling effect, typical of a thriller genre.	Sudden pauses (silence) create confusion for spectator and they become aware of editing issues pulling them out of the action in the film. Dialogue quiet and not very clear, sometimes unable to hear. Dialogue could be recorded on microphones to emphasise speech and become more prominent in the investigation scenes. This could create a more chilling effect when Mr Harvey ids talking as it may then appear that he it talking more to the audience rather than the investigator opposite him.